loved your story witchy. almost thought i was in the Amazon. your great at giving great details in all your stories.Head hunters it something i never thought of. thanks everyone for doing my challenge you all done a great job.

Witchy,

You are the queen of metaphors.  "splashes of color", "orchids, waxy and luminous", "cries of birds, chattering of monkeys", "beady eyes like telescopes", "river that wound thru like a dark ribbon of green".  This makes your storytelling vivid and real.  Isn't it funny that a hand full of words can set the scene and make stories come alive.  You are so good at description, the very telling of your story takes us all back with you struggling in the rain forest.  WOW!!!

Susan'  Like I posted before. You completely nailed that story. I was rock solid,Well written.It was just a great excellent job!!!!IN ALL points....

Jomel.Your imaginative mind is what I have been watching. You reach out there in your thoughts and put that action write into print.The twist got me.After I had accepted it as a daydream.When the tennis shoes swished.I said you sly fox JoMel !!Got me!!!!Great

Witchy, The work of a seasoned writer from start to finish.Great job. I was watching and learning your technique as I read.Great discriptions,I watched how you did the flash back/subject shifts and then back to the story.Easy to read.A#1 Job !!!!!!!!

 

One more thing A#1 challenge Susan. I really liked the way you used the penknife,gum and string.And when he drank from a leaf you could since his thirst. OK Later

Correction Susan!! When( you) drank from the leaf .I could sense( your) thirst. Sorry!!Susan, We write in First Second,Third person and somtimes it gets mixed up....Jericho